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The charts below show how much money was spent for 2017 and 2018. The following table chart shows that the national government is the largest funder for the police in both 2017 and 2018.

The charts below show how much money was spent for 2017 and 2018. The following table chart shows that the national government is the largest funder for the police in both 2017 and 2018.
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A glance at the two pie charts that provide the distributions of expenditures in 2017 and 2018.
Besides
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, the table reveals the police budget sources between 2017 and 2018.
Overall
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, the vast majority of the money was spent on salaries, whilst the expenses of technology were the fewest.
On the other hand
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, the main source of the police budget was from the national government.
According to
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 the information shown in the table, the national government provided 175.5
million
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euros
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 to the police in 2017 and the funding rose to 177.8
million
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euros
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 in 2018.
Besides
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,money from other sources like grants increased 0.5
million
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euros
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 from 2017 to 2018 by 38
million
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euros
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 and 38.5
euros
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while
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 money from local taxes grew from 91.2
million
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euros
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 to 102.3
million
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euros
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. When it comes to how the budget was spent, the proportion of salaries
reduced
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was reduced
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 from 95% to 69% since the costs of technology witnessed a 6% increase from 8% to 14%. What should be particularly mentioned is that the expenses on buildings and transport
kept
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remained
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 the same
as
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at
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 17% in the given time.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "besides".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, euros with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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