The graph below shows the consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004
The
line
graph shows how the consumption of different kinds of meats has changed from 1979 to 2004.
Overall
, the
line
of
chicken
meat shows an increased
trend
while
the lines of beef, lamb and fish meats show a decreased
trend
in high or low levels.
Firstly
, the beef
line
shows the highest consumption of over 200
grams
p
.
p
. per
week
in 1979
then
it reached its maximum peak in 1982 approximately from there there was a fall
trend
where it found its lower consumption of over 100
grams
pp per
week
in 2004. The
chicken
line
shows the opposite
trend
than the
line
beef which means the
chicken
line
had an increasing
trend
from 1979 to 2004
this
trend
started with almost 150
grams
p
.
p
. per
week
in 1979
then
ended with 250
grams
p
.
p
. per
week
. Despite the lamb and
chicken
line
starting with the same quantity of
grams
around 150
grams
p
.
p
. per
week
in 1979 the
trend
of the lamb
line
decreased ending in over 50
grams
p
.
p
. per
week
in 2004.
Finally
, the fish
line
shows a constant
trend
that kept around 50
grams
pp. per
week
from 1979 to 2005.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words line, chicken, trend, grams, p, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 8 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fish
  • meat
  • poultry
  • beef
  • lamb
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • gradual
  • significant
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trough
  • steady
  • correlation
  • period
  • data
  • comparison
  • predominant
  • kilograms per capita
  • dietary habits
  • health consciousness
  • sustainability
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