The diagram below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.

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The given maps give information about how Queen Mary Hospital changed in three different years(1960,1980 and 2000).

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while

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the hospital remained

for

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the original site, there have been significant changes in facilities during the period given.

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, the land which was occupied by

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car

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the car

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park

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has been reduced in size by

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apply

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half. In 1960, opposite the main road, to the south, the hospital was built and it was located next to the shopping

centre

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. There was,

however

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car

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a car

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park

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just below the hospital and a farmland in the west of

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car

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the car

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park

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. In 1980, the shopping

centre

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was demolished in order to build the cancer

centre

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and pharmacy.

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farmland

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the farmland

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converted

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was converted

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into a nursing school and reduced in size. In 2000,

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the nursing school decreased in size by

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apply

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half

as well as

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car

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the car

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park

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, the cancer

centre

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extended in a south

eastly

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easterly

east

direction where it overtook half of the land previously occupied by the nursing school.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, park, centre with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

160 words

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