Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
In recent times,
people
are thinking in a different
way Change the word
differently
for
their Change preposition
about
healt
problems Correct your spelling
health
that
is why they are going for Correct pronoun usage
which
herbals
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herbal
treatement
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treatment
instead
of going to their common doctor.In this
essay,I will discuss both advantages and disadvantages and in my opinion,the disadvantages outweight
the advantages.
On the one hand,common Correct your spelling
outweigh
medicines
and treatments
are given by certifieddoctors
.Correct your spelling
certified doctors
Doctors
are well trained
,which is why they first Add a hyphen
well-trained
analysis
the disease and Replace the word
analyse
then
do few
tests.After that,Correct article usage
a few
doctors
are given medicines
and treatments
to patients.In addition
,doctors
are given proper
Correct article usage
a proper
time table
Correct your spelling
timetable
when
Change preposition
for when
people
will eat
their Verb problem
take
medicines
.Additionally
,doctors
observes
patients on a regular basis, Change the verb form
observe
due to
the fact that people
's recover
ratio is very high.Replace the word
recovery
For instance
,first world
countries Add a hyphen
first-world
treatements
are so good and recovering ratio is so high.
Correct your spelling
treatments
On the other hand
,alternative medicines
and treatments
are cheap as well as
environment
friendly.Replace the word
environmentally
Herbals
Change the noun form
Herbal
treatments
avoid major operations,which is why it is very cheap.A growing number of people
,who are scared of major operations mainly want this
kind of alternative medicines
and treatments
.In addition
,poor people
from third world
countries can not afford Add a hyphen
third-world
medicines
and treatments
because in their countries health checkup is not free.Many medicine plants using
chemicals which are very harmful Wrong verb form
use
for
our environment Change the preposition
to
that
is why Correct pronoun usage
which
people
are avoiding common medicines
.For example
,chemical plants all over the world are one of major
Correct article usage
the major
casue
of air pollution.
In conclusion,Correct your spelling
cause
causes
people
can go for different kind
of alternatives because of Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
low cost
Add a hyphen
low-cost
medicines
and avoid major opetion
Correct your spelling
option
issue
but in my thinking,I still believe that traditional Fix the agreement mistake
issues
treatments
and medicines
are very effective and people
should go for common treatments
,which will help them to recover from diseases.Submitted by mokaddamul on
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