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The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004

The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004
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The line graph compares four countries in terms of
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price
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the price
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 of
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banana
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bananas
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from 1994 to 2004.
Overall
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,
the
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all regions experienced different trends in the time period.
While
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 the
price
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 of
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banana
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bananas
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 in Germany declined with some fluctuations, the cost in other countries rose over time. As the graph shows, the cost of
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banana
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bananas
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 in Japan started at 1.9
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dollar
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dollars
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 per kg in 1994.
Then
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, the figure increased rapidly in 1995 and reached the pick point with 2.8
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dollar
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dollars
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 per kg. After that
among
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over
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 nine
years
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years,
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 the
price
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 of
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banana
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bananas
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 in Japan had some changes and in 2004 it amounted
above
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to above
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 2.5
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dollar
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dollars
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.
By contrast
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, the
price
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 of
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banana
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bananas
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 in France experienced an increase in the
seven year
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 period. In 2001,
in
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banana
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 cost stood at about 1.7
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dollar
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dollars
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, but
then
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 it had considerably
decrease
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decreased
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 over
next
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the next
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 two years in France, amounted
1
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to 1
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dollar
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. As for Germany and
USA
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the USA
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, they started the
price
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 of
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banana
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bananas
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 in 1994
with
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at
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 1.4
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dollar
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dollars
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 and 1.6
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dollar
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dollars
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, respectively. After the years, they faced some changes and stayed
steadily
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steady
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with
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at
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 approximately the same
price
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, banana, dollar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • price fluctuation
  • steady increase/decrease
  • significant rise/drop
  • trend
  • noticeable
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • highest
  • lowest
  • throughout the period
  • stable
  • volatile
  • potential reasons
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