The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012.

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The given graph illustrates the sum of health spending as percentages of GPD and, it demonstrates the data about 12 countries in Europe for the
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2002, 2007, and 2012.
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, it is apparent that Switzerland has the highest health expenditure in all three
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equal to each
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.
By contrast
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, Estonia has the least amount of expense of health in all the
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similar to the others.
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, Belgium and Spain have the same totals in the 3 of the
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with Belgium being 2 more than Spain. Slovenia, Denmark, Lithuania, Norway, and, Poland all had
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identical charges in the
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2002 and 2007.
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, in 2013, they all were slightly more than the previous 2
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with Denmark and Norway being the highest, and Lithuania being the lowest.
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, the Netherlands where the percentage of funding has decreased by 1 every year.
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, Luxembourg was equivalent
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Spain in
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2002 and 2007, but had and downward trend in 2012.
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, France where in the year 2007 it hit the peak increasing from 2002 and declining gradually in 2012 again.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Health expenditure
  • Percentage of GDP
  • Trend analysis
  • Economic prosperity
  • Health outcomes
  • Quality of healthcare
  • Allocation of resources
  • Healthcare services
  • Political, social, and economic factors
  • International organizations
  • Government policies
  • Predictive trends
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