The first pie chart illustrates the amount of energy utilized in an average Australian household. The second one demonstrates consequence of using energy leading to the greenhouse gas emissions. By and large, it can be seen that Australia people tend to utilize a great deal of heating energy.

The first pie chart illustrates the amount of energy utilized in an average Australian household. The second one demonstrates consequence of using energy leading to the greenhouse gas emissions.

By and large, it can be seen that Australia people tend to utilize a great deal of heating energy.
The first pie chart illustrates the amount of
energy
utilized in an average Australian household. The second one demonstrates
consequence
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of using
energy
leading to
the
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greenhouse gas
emissions
. By and large, it can be seen that
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people tend to utilize a great deal of heating
energy
.
Emissions
of heating and refrigeration are almost equal. As regards using
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of Australian family, heating dominates the other
energy
, at 42 per
cent
. Water heating follows behind at 30 per
cent
,
while
other appliances occupy a proportion equaling
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half, at 15 per
cent
. Australian citizens do not utilize too much refrigeration, lighting, and cooling
energy
, they take up 7, 4, and 2 per
cent
respectively. Turning to greenhouse gas
emissions
, cooling accounts for the least, at only 3 per
cent
. Heating and refrigeration
emissions
are almost the same, approximately 14 per
cent
,
while
the figure for other appliances is twofold as much as them, at 28 per
cent
. Lighting emission comprises an inconsiderable proportion, with just 8 per
cent
.
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belongs to water heating, which is four times as much as lighting, at 32 per
cent
.
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