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The table and pie chart illustrate populations in Australia according to different nationalities and areas. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The given charts demonstrate the data about the proportions of nations and their preferences about living in urban or suburban areas. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is clearly seen that the majority of dwellers are local. Foreigners are mostly from Britain. Number of the people from New Zealand, China and Dutch is less than the number of other nationalities. Most of the dweller's priorities are living in cities rather than countryside. Moving to a more detailed analysis, Australians represent approximately 3 quarters of settlers in Australia, which is 73 per
cent
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. British come next with a figure of less than 10 per
cent
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 and nearly double
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that
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of New Zealanders
which
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who
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 constitute 3 per
cent
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 of all nationalities. Chinese and Dutch share nearly the same percentages 2 and 1 per
cent
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 respectively. People from other nationalities are nearly 5 times less than Australians with the number of 14 per
cent
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. In terms of living territories , people mostly live in cities, with a ratio higher than 80 per
cent
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 in all nations. Nearly all Chinese prefer city life
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 of living far from technology in suburban areas. The figures for British, New Zealanders and Dutch are fluctuating between 80 and 90 per
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 for urban parts and between 10 and 20 per
cent
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 for the countryside.
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The Chine
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Chine
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Chinese
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is
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 the least living in rural zones with 1 per
cent
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while
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 Australians are the most with a portion
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of
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20 per
cent
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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