Nowadays, more people are migrating to other countries than ever before. In order to become integrated into society in their adopted countries, immigration should abandon their old ways and adapt to local customs and code of behaviour. Do you agree or disagree?

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As known that immigration one of the most important organizations in any
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part
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of
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foreigner
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foreigners
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in order of purpose to live or work even
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abroad. The rules of staying must be set by their own rules to ensure that society will not be affected in any way by
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who come from different
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. When
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immigrate abroad to find new opportunities to achieve their goals that will give idea of what they are going through to succeed. I agree , that immigration
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to come with ways to contribute of development the
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by creating guarantee standards structures of
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, when foreigners travel to
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for sure they have plans to live better
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for themselves, so giving them chances to stay with legal status will help them increase income
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economic activity in
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countries
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where they are, example open source projects will help local businesses build more wealth and improve quality of living .
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of industries will be important for those
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to reduce
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any problems in terms of jobs.
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, most of
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people
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who ask
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residence
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educational background,
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will drive knowledgeable and experienced to
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country
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of
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with professional qualifications when they get right to residence as local citizenships will be able to provide their services and support to
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community.
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, immigration
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roles
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of guide
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people
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to follow the rules of
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country
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by legal.
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Try to clearly state your position on the prompt in the introduction and reiterate it in the conclusion for a stronger impact.
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Ensure your essay aligns with the specific topic asked, focusing on whether immigrants should adapt to new customs and behaviors rather than broader roles of immigration.
Content
You have provided some good insights on the potential benefits immigrants bring to a country.
Coherence and Cohesion
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