Tobacco is a kind of drug. People have been free to use it. Some people think that it should be illegal to use it comparing with other drugs. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What is your opinion?

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Individuals have been given the liberty to practice tobacco drugs but certain demographics of society think that it should be unlawful to use them. I largely agree with the said notion

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increasing health issues and loss of youth. To commence with views of disagreement that drug is used as

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herbal medication for different diseases in small villages as they do not have access to all the company's basic medical stuff so they benefit tobacco for healing.

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, it will affect the agriculture field as well because some of the farmers grow it and export it to different countries that use it to

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medication.Banning it will create a huge impact in some fields. Shifting towards views of agreement,

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high usage of

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drug it leads to severe chronic illness like cancer, lung problems and many more.To explain,as it is available without money and people do not know its drawbacks they start getting addicted especially people who are under the poverty line and low income.

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'An Indian' 2019 survey there is 75% of transport drivers have kidney issues and asthma problems and it is

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mentioned that they smoke 3 or 4 times a day.

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,the government should declare the usage of tobacco as lawbreaking.

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strengthening views

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addiction among youth.In today's competitive era, young minds are always under stress for jobs ,for competitive exams and studies so they start taking drugs in the form of cigarettes, chewing gums and many more.

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, they start becoming addicted to it.Even though these days cigars come smokeless it is hard for families to find that their children are using drugs.

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these things young death rates have increased.

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WHO(World Health Organisation) charts ,it is found that 8 out of 10 kids are addicted to vapes.

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,declaring it illegal will create a positive impact on pupils.

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it has some positive uses yet prohibiting it will save many young lives and I

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strongly believe that forbidding it will be beneficial for youth and many people aliveness.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

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Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 7.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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healthcare costs
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Tobacco is a kind of drug. People have been free to use it. Some people think that it should be illegal to use it comparing with other drugs. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What is your opinion?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

It is important for everyone including young people to save money for their future. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The global demand for oil and gas is increasing. Some believe that we should therefore encourage the exploitation of remote areas. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people believe that computers and the internet are more important to a child’s education than schools and teachers. However, others argue that schools and teachers play a more important role in the education of children. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.