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The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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I strongly believe that the ideas proposed by the older generations are way too traditional because our world is constantly evolving and they have left the upcoming generations with a crazy amount of unsolved problems that are going to need fresh solutions thanks to innovation and new ways of thinking
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 of repetition and lack of determination. Climatic change is an uprising difficulty that needs to be faced and talked about, specifically to younger people because the older ones are incapable of dealing with it. They have never experienced something similar on
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 a scale before. They cannot comprehend the bigger picture which provokes denial in their way of thinking and shows that they are too small-minded.
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, the 45th and 47th president of the United States of America denies the fact that climate change even exists, which is far from what the world needs.
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, immigration specifically in Europe becomes a major issue because of the number of people arriving or just escaping war zones,
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, far-right political parties are concerned about themselves and their security. Everything that surrounds us is made in other countries and our roots are made of multiple cultures, so we should be more tolerant of each other because we will never know when we will need other people’s help.
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, Neo-Nazi political parties are rising in Germany and Austria because of their thoughts about the lack of security.
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, I wholeheartedly disagree because the ideas and proposals made by older generations are too conventional and need to be more elaborated to better understand upcoming difficulties.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph clearly has a main idea and supporting details flow logically from that. This will enhance clarity.
task achievement
While you've developed the ideas well, consider adding more examples to strengthen the argument, particularly in areas where you discuss generational differences.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes your argument, reinforcing your stance on the issue.
task achievement
The use of real-world examples like former U.S. presidents and the situation in Europe side enriches the discussion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traditional ideas
  • Modern life
  • Younger generations
  • Stability
  • Guidance
  • Foundation
  • Cultural heritage
  • Rigid gender roles
  • Resistance to new technologies
  • Adaptability
  • Innovative solutions
  • Respecting elders
  • Maintaining family bonds
  • Stifle progress
  • Fusion of ideas
  • Outdated values
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