The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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generation

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have their own

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of living

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behaving.

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view is not helpful for

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can be defended because

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can give good

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can take a lot of profit from the older one. Their

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can be useful to prevent dangerous things that

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happened in the past.

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or at work lead to

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can be a father who struggled in

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wealth after hard work.

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to everything he wants.

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idea about

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is not always efficient. As the world is moving, older people can not be right about everything.

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we have to let things move

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their own

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it when they were young.

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is moving too fast, older people can not always be right about the

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of living.

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can help

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sometimes they have to let things go. With the advances of

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today

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can be useless. In my opinion, I

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that there is always something relevant to take from adults. But we

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task response

Your main view is not fully clear. Say early if you agree, disagree, or agree only in part. Then keep the same view in all parts.

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Give more detail for each point. Explain how old ideas can help, and why some old ideas may not work in life today.

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Your examples are on the topic, but make the link more clear. For example, say how rules from past work or sport can keep young people safe now.

coherence and cohesion

The essay has a clear four-part plan: start, two main parts, and end. Keep this plan, but make the first part more direct.

coherence and cohesion

Use clear link words to show the two sides: 'On the one hand', 'On the other hand', and 'However'.

coherence and cohesion

Make each main part follow one simple order: main idea, why it is true, example, and short link back to the question.

coherence and cohesion

The last part repeats your view, but it could be more direct. End with one clear answer: old ideas still help, but young people also need to deal with new life in their own way.

task response

You answer both parts of the topic: old people can help, but some old ideas may not fit life today.

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You use real and easy-to-understand examples from work, sport, family, and phone use.

coherence and cohesion

Your ideas are put in a clear order, with one part for each side.

coherence and cohesion

You have both a start and an end, and you use some link words such as 'For example' and 'By contrast'.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

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for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
namely
to illustrate
take, for example

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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294 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Traditional ideas
Modern life
Younger generations
Stability
Guidance
Foundation
Cultural heritage
Rigid gender roles
Resistance to new technologies
Adaptability
Innovative solutions
Respecting elders
Maintaining family bonds
Stifle progress
Fusion of ideas
Outdated values

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