The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
The population is divided in two old,
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think that youngsters should behave in a traditional manner. Use synonyms
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, some others think that it would be not helpful to prepare the next generation for the future. Linking Words
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essay totally agrees with the idea that young Linking Words
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should live, think and behave in a traditional way. I believe that parents should educate their children a bit the hard way on different points. Use synonyms
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the hard way for them to be respectful of their elders. If a child is raised in a house where he can do whatever he wants, in the future he is going to be really lost because no one told him that he cannot do Use synonyms
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or that. Generally, if a child has learned to listen and Linking Words
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a person who needs more Use synonyms
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he will fit very well into society, in the world of business. Use synonyms
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helps show the meaning of a family, that it is very important to take care of them and enjoy their presence.
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Secondly
, in traditional Linking Words
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, religion is generally very important. Because it shows the values of life and wisdom, It morally disciplines souls and Use synonyms
thus
preserves social stability. It can provide a moral, ethical and cultural framework. Linking Words
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, it gives a sense of community, like I said before about the family, to share, and Linking Words
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, being raised in a traditional manner can bring us much: humanity, Linking Words
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, wisdom, and discipline, among many other things.Use synonyms
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Introduction
The essay could benefit from a more specific and balanced introduction, presenting both views on tradition and modern life's demands. A thesis statement clearly outlining the writer's position would also strengthen the introduction.
Coherence
Use a wider range of linking words and phrases to improve the flow of ideas. Also, paragraphs should have clear topic sentences and supporting sentences that develop the main points effectively.
Examples
Ideas in the essay were not fully developed or illustrated with specific and convincing examples. Further elaboration on points and inclusion of factual, relevant examples would significantly enhance the response.
Task Response
Make sure to address the topic from multiple angles to fully respond to the question. The essay shows a tendency to agree without considering opposing viewpoints or discussing the topic's implications for modern life.