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The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagrams illustrate the advancements of working tools in the Stone Age in different
years
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen from both pictures the
size
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 and shape changed between
Tool
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 A and
Tool
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B
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. The
Size
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 of
tool
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B
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 became fatter from the back
view
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 than it was in the initial
years
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,
however
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side
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view
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 became thin and the front
view
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 became thicker. It is conspicuous that 1.4
million
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years
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 ago the
size
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 of the front
view
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tool
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 was a little thin.
Whereas
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 the
side
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view
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 was thicker and the tip was not sharp. If look at
tool
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 a from the back
side
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 its width decreased,
while
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 its height extended. The
size
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 of the
tool
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 was 5 cm in 1.4
million
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years
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 ago. Probing ahead, in the year 0.8
million
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 ago the front
view
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 of
tool
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b
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 was wider as compared to
tool
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 A 1.4
million
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years
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 ago and the tip became sharp enough to cut any objects.
Furthermore
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, it can be experienced that the
side
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view
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 of
Tool
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B
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 became very thin in shape as compared to
Tool
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 A, it was fatter than
Tool
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B
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.
Additionally
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, the back
view
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 of
Tool
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B
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 became thicker and the base of the
tool
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 was larger in
size
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 compared to
Tool
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 A.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, size, tool, b, view, side, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Stone Age
  • tools
  • cutting
  • development
  • rudimentary
  • sophisticated
  • progression
  • unworked pebbles
  • flake tools
  • bifacial tools
  • efficiency
  • materials
  • emergence
  • characteristics
  • functionality
  • craftsmanship
  • precision
  • hunting
  • carving
  • advancements
  • significance
  • human development
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