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The graph below gives information about internet users in three countries between 1999 and 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates the
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of
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internet
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users
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 over the 10-year period in
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USA
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the USA
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,
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, and Mexico as well.
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 is it clear that
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 and
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 the highest growth.
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, India is the lowest percentage for 10 years.
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 the beginning,
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the USA
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 the leader for
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users
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 and approximately 20%
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followed by
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 only 10% of the total population. Following that, in 2002,
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 surpassed
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the USA
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that
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 almost 50%
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users
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of users
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.
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 significantly
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the
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 2009, accounted almost 100%. By the end of the period,
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internet
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users
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nearly
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 90% of the total population. In 1999, India
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 the lowest percentage at approximately 5%.
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 increase from 1999 until 2001. Nearly in 2005, the growth of India's
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 5 times since the beginning.
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, Mexican
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 consume a great amount of the Net which peaked at nearly 45% in 2009.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, users, usa, canada with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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