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The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2010 and the present day.

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The two maps illustrate the development of university campus
accommodation
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 and facilities between 2010 and the present day. It can be seen that there was the demolition of facilities in the area, making way for the construction of students’ accommodations.
Firstly
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, the number of
student
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accommodation
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 buildings has increased in number and size.
while
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 a university office has been knocked down and transformed into a science building.
In addition
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, the northeast
in
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this
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 area witnessed the demolition of a teaching block ( arts & science) in 2010 and the erection of an arts building. shops and restaurants have been removed and
reconstructed
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student
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accommodation
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 in the southeast.
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 the lawn and outside seating area which were next to the lake have been removed, the
student
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accommodation
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 has been expanded and became
student
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 facilities including shops, offices, etc in the south of the university campus.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words accommodation, student with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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