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Logging of the rain forests is a serious problem and it may lead to the extinction of animal life and human life. Do you agree or disagree?

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One of the most recent trends in today’s world is the upsurge in the cutting of the woodlands is a major issue and may lead to the death of
animals
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 and human beings. There is a wide sprit of belief among people that
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 is a popular subject of debate. I tend to believe that it has more negative impacts than positive and in
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 essay, I will demonstrate the reasons. On the one hand, even critics may point out some drawbacks. They might say that to develop a country perhaps, it is necessary to clear some areas of cities.
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, rulers give authorization to remove the forest to construct new bridges and highway roads.
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 to that, tourism attraction can be increased by building hotels and shopping complexes.
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, there are a number of arguments in favour of my stance. Mainly, it leads to a lack of rain because of that people and
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 have to suffer without water.
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, wild
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 come to the villages to search for water and food and they destroy
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 cultivation and those who do not come out from the forest die themselves. Truly, it is the most predominant one, and it has many negative consequences in various ways.
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, it has significantly increased who die from elephant attacks.
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, humans encroach habitats of
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 for their own needs because of that they come out of the forest and die in road accidents. In my opinion, the whole world is focusing on educating citizens about the positive impacts of protecting forests in conclusion,
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 it needs to be done for the development of a country, logging of the rainforest is indeed too dire to ignore.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deforestation
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • carbon sink
  • global warming
  • indigenous tribes
  • livelihood
  • displacement
  • cultural erosion
  • soil erosion
  • water cycle
  • humidity levels
  • rainfall patterns
  • droughts
  • ecosystem services
  • pollination
  • climate change
  • logging
  • rain forests
  • habitats
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