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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The first line chart displays percentages of electrical tools owned by families in a particular country between the period time 1920 to 2019. Meanwhile, the second graph shows the number of
hours
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 spent on chores in households every
week
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 in the same period.
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, there is a visible correlation between the two charts where the more people own electrical appliances, the less housework they need to do per
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. Electrical appliances ownership increases rapidly every year and refrigerators have the greatest growth.
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in 1920 nobody had a refrigerator, but the amount rose drastically starting from 1940 to the end of 2019, and every household have one. In comparison, the washing machine was the most common electronics with ownership reaching 40% of households.
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 number rose to 75% in 1960 before slightly dipping to around 65% to eventually become steady at approximately 72% and fall behind the other two appliances. The number of
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 of chores,
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, fell halfway from 50 to 20
hours
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 per
week
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 per household in 1960. After that, it experienced only a small decrease to just over 10
hours
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 each
week
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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