The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The given graph illustrates the proportion of
households
by providing different data of
technology usage between 1990 and 1999.
Change preposition
on
Overall
, throughout the years, they experienced an increasing trend. Leading by the washing machine households
reached a
highest percentage Change the article
the
while
the DVD player waste obtained the least percentage of wastes. Moreover
, the washing machine, computer, phone and internet households
witnessed a gradually rose
, Replace the word
gradual rise
whereas
the dvd
player litters Correct your spelling
DVD
were fluctuated
.
Change to the active voice
fluctuated
have fluctuated
In addition
, the
washing machine Correct article usage
apply
households
got
a peak number at 80% in 1999, Verb problem
reached
following
by the compter at about 75%, and the third position was phone Wrong verb form
followed
wastes
reached Fix the agreement mistake
waste
at
60% in 1999 which had dramatically Change preposition
apply
rose
from 20% in 1995. Wrong verb form
risen
However
, the dvd
player Correct your spelling
DVD
was
fluctuated by starting at approximately 25% in 1995, Unnecessary verb
apply
then
decreased to 15% in 1996 and gradually grew up to 40% in 1999.
Moving to the internet, starting with the least number of households
and experiencind
decreased slightly Correct your spelling
experiences
at
20% in 1996. Change preposition
to
Finally
, rose gradually to 40% in 1999.Submitted by innezgracias on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 3 times.
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