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Band 4

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure your essay has a clear logical flow. It's good practice to use linking words or phrases to help the reader follow your argument.
Task Achievement
Be mindful of spelling and grammatical errors, especially with key terminology relevant to your topic. Small inaccuracies can distract from the overall quality.
Task Achievement
You effectively summarized the main features and made relevant comparisons where applicable.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your essay structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion is well executed, contributing to a coherent and cohesive response.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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