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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The graphs below demonstrate that in
San
Diego
,
California
 and the
res
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rest
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to
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of
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 the world the
water
that
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apply
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is utilized for
diffient
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different
 purposes like Residential, Industry, and Agriculture.
Overall
, the pie graphs
demostrate
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demonstrate
 in each location the
diffient
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different
usage
to
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of
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water
. In
San
Diego
 County
the
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Residential
usage
 is of
most
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highest
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 percentage. In
California
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California,
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 the
water
usage
 with the most percentage is
Residental
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residential
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 as well.
Finally
, worldwide Agriculture
is
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 the highest percentage. The three locations have very different divisions regarding
the
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apply
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water
usage
. Both in
San
Diego
 and
Woldwide
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worldwide
their
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there
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 is a factor that has more than half of the
water
that is
 utilized.
Their
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There
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 is 23
percent
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per cent
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 of the
water
, utilized for
a
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an
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 Industrial purpose in
San
Diego
 and worldwide. When combing the three numbers shown
for
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Agriculture
usage
 is the highest factor that
water
 is used for. The only pie graph
wich
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which
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 is divided almost equally is in the location of
California
. In
worldwide
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the worldwide
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 pie
graph
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graph,
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 it
show
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 that the residential
usages
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usage
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is
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are
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 at 8
percent
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per cent
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. A third of the
water
that is
 used for an Industrial
porpuse
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purposes
 is in the location of
California
.
Also
, more than half of the h20 used in
the
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San
Diego
 County is for
a
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Residential use.
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Task Achievement
You effectively summarized the main features and made relevant comparisons where applicable.
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Your essay structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion is well executed, contributing to a coherent and cohesive response.

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