Many voung people these days choose to live alone instead of living with other family members. Do the advantages of this practice outweigh any of its disadvantages?
Choosing to live alone for some youth generation are one of the big decisions that they make in life. In recent times, it is a common thing to see many young
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issue are equally the same compared to its benefits which I will discuss in the upcoming paragraphs.
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On the other hand
, the majority of the youth generation is choosing to live alone because they want to have a better quality of life. Linking Words
For example
, with the aim of getting a great deal of salary, a young girl from a small village has to move to a metropolitan city. Linking Words
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, that girl should leave her family and start to live alone. Linking Words
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to improve their discipline and problem-solving skills because there are so many unexpected moments that will happen as they live with themselves.
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To conclude
, there are always good and bad impacts that the youth generation will face when they choose to start living alone. So, I do not think that the bad impacts are bigger than the good ones, respectively.Linking Words
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