Many voung people these days choose to live alone instead of living with other family members. Do the advantages of this practice outweigh any of its disadvantages?
Choosing to live alone for some youth generation are one of the big decisions that they make in life. In recent times, it is a common thing to see many young
people
tend
Verb problem
apply
to begin
their adulting journey by starting to live with their own self instead
of living in their parent's house. I believe the drawbacks of this
issue are equally the same compared to its benefits which I will discuss in the upcoming paragraphs.
From my point of view, the main disadvantage of this
issue is there will be financial struggles that younger people
have to face. In fact, young people
are not financially stable at this
stage of life. Furthermore
, they are also
going to miss the opportunity to take care of their parents. Especially, if their parents are not in good health condition.
On the other hand
, the majority of the youth generation is choosing to live alone because they want to have a better quality of life. For example
, with the aim of getting a great deal of salary, a young girl from a small village has to move to a metropolitan city. Consequently
, that girl should leave her family and start to live alone. Moreover
, living alone is also
beneficial for young people
to improve their discipline and problem-solving skills because there are so many unexpected moments that will happen as they live with themselves.
To conclude
, there are always good and bad impacts that the youth generation will face when they choose to start living alone. So, I do not think that the bad impacts are bigger than the good ones, respectively.Submitted by nadhyra.haninda on
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