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Take a look at the graphics and complete the task. The chart and table provide data about cars registered in one country over a period of time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Take a look at the graphics and complete the task. The chart and table provide data about cars registered in one country over a period of time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two graphs depict the
petrol
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 prices and the amount and type of
cars
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 registered between 2003 and 2015. From an
overall
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 perspective, we can clearly see that the more the price of
petrol
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 is increasing, the fewer
cars
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 are registered.
For example
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, in 2003, the gas was about 0,8 pounds per litre as the registration of new
cars
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 was nearly around 9,3%. In comparison, in 2011, the price of
petrol
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 sharply increased to 1,4 pounds per litre and the percentage of
cars
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 registered was roughly about 6,3%.
However
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, the second table illustrates the change in the type of
cars
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 registered
according to
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 their size and engine types.
For example
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, in 2003, people who were buying small
cars
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 represented 5,2%,
while
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petrol
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engines
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 were at
his
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their
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 highest rate with 83,1% and hybrid
engines
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 were not popular at all. In opposition, in 2015, small
cars
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 represented 6,2% but
petrol
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engines
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 slightly decreased in rate with 61,2% ,
while
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 diesel
engines
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 obtained 37,8% and Hybrid 0,!% of
cars
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 registered. In summary , between 2003 and 2015, the price
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petrol
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of petrol
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 sharply increased which made people buy fewer
cars
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 .
However
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, those who still buy
cars
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 choose the smallest ones and are more economical in gas with diesel
engines
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "for example, however, while".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words petrol, cars, engines with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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