The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.
The diagram depicts the
process
of producing instant
noodles
. This
process
has several stages that will be described in the following paragraphs.
Overall
, the production process
of instant
noodles
consists of 8 stages, beginning with putting flour in silos and ending with labelling the cups of instant
noodles
.
In the first stage, the main ingredient of instant
noodles
(flour) is transferred to silos by trucks. After that flour is placed into a mixer and blended with water and oil to turn into dough
. Then
, the dough
goes through a machine with the assistance of rollers. This
machine generates dough
strips. In the subsequent stage, dough
stripes are put into noodles
discs prior to the cooking and drying process
. Next,
some vegetables and spices are added to cooked and dried noodles
that are put in cups. Finally
, the cups of instant
noodles
are labelled and sealed. The packaged instant
noodles
are distributed to the market.Submitted by maryam.nutrition1988 on
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