Some people believe that politicians are more influential than scientists, whilst others believe that scientists have more influence. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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is think
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by some
people
that
politicians
are more influential than
scientists
where
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whereas
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other
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others
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believe that
scientists
influence
more than
politicians
.
This
essay
elaborate
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both
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sides and
agree
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with
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that
scientists
are more influential than
politician
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politicians
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.
Firstly
, it is argued that
scientists
have more
influence
than
other
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others
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. They are creators
in
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all modern technology,
modern
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and modern
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science though they have no supernatural power to manipulate
people
but
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they
influence
over
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us by creating amazing technology.
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, in
modern
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era's
children
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it is a common dream to be
a
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engineer or
works
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on
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technology,it is
a
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great
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influenced by the
scientist
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scientists
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there
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explored power
influence
today's young generation.
Moreover
, almost every
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people
do not pass a single moment without
scientifical
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scientific
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things or gadgets, our society depends on
it
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, so it is
also
a
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image of influencers.
On the other hand
, some
people
think that
politician
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politicians
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are more
influencer
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influential
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than
scientists
. Though
politics
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political
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leader
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leaders
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give
speech
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speeches
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influence
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to influence
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people
but
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apply
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they give it
particular
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a particular
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one
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apply
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group
of
people
not every
ages
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age
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.
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,
people
of all
ages
can
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not
allow
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allowed
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to participate in
votes
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voting
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and they give their
speech
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speeches
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only
one
purpose or political
related
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apply
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which is influenced
one
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by one
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particular
group
or
matured
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group
of
people
.
Furthermore
, it is true that
politicians
have influencer power but it works on those
people
who are
matured
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mature
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enough and understand politics or social rules. In conclusion,
politicians
have
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influence
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influenced
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by their speech or political work
one
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by one
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particular
group
of
people
while
scientists
have
also
influenced
people
on
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of
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every
ages
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age
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by
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their creations and my opinion is
scientis
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scientist
scientists
are more
influence
than
politicians
.
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