Some people believe that politicians are more influential than scientists, whilst others believe that scientists have more influence. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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is think
by some Change the verb form
is thought
people
that politicians
are more influential than scientists
where
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whereas
other
believe that Fix the agreement mistake
others
scientists
influence
more than politicians
. This
essay elaborate
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elaborates
both
sides and Change preposition
on both
agree
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agrees
with
that Change preposition
apply
scientists
are more influential than politician
.
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politicians
Firstly
, it is argued that scientists
have more influence
than other
. They are creators Fix the agreement mistake
others
in
all modern technology, Change preposition
of
modern
science though they have no supernatural power to manipulate Correct word choice
and modern
people
but
they Remove the conjunction
apply
influence
over
us by creating amazing technology. Change preposition
apply
For example
, in modern
era's Correct article usage
the modern
children
it is a common dream to be Add a comma
children,
a
engineer or Change the article
an
works
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work
on
technology,it is Change preposition
in
a
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apply
great
influenced by the Change the word
greatly
scientist
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scientists
there
explored power Correct pronoun usage
who
influence
today's young generation. Moreover
, almost every ages
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age
people
do not pass a single moment without scientifical
things or gadgets, our society depends on Correct your spelling
scientific
it
, so it is Correct pronoun usage
them
also
a
image of influencers.
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an
On the other hand
, some people
think that politician
are more Fix the agreement mistake
politicians
influencer
than Replace the word
influential
scientists
. Though politics
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political
leader
give Fix the agreement mistake
leaders
speech
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speeches
influence
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to influence
people
but
they give it Remove the conjunction
apply
particular
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a particular
one
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apply
group
of people
not every ages
. Change to a singular noun
age
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, people
of all ages
can
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are
allow
to participate in Wrong verb form
allowed
votes
and they give their Wrong verb form
voting
speech
only Fix the agreement mistake
speeches
one
purpose or political related
which is influenced Correct word choice
apply
one
particular Change preposition
by one
group
or matured
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mature
group
of people
. Furthermore
, it is true that politicians
have influencer power but it works on those people
who are matured
enough and understand politics or social rules.
In conclusion, Replace the word
mature
politicians
have
Verb problem
are
influence
by their speech or political work Change the verb form
influenced
one
particular Change preposition
by one
group
of people
while
scientists
have also
influenced people
on
every Change preposition
of
ages
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age
by
their creations and my opinion is Change preposition
with
scientis
are more Correct your spelling
scientist
scientists
influence
than politicians
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