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The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museum

The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museum
#visitors #four #museum
The provided diagram presents data about the
number
 of
visitors
 to four international
museums
 (
Louvre
, Vatican
Museums
, London Science
Museum
, and Shenzhen
Museum
) from 1980 to 2015. Looking from an
overall
 perspective, the
number
 of
visitors
gone
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apply
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to
Louvre
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the Louvre
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 and Vatican
Museums
were
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was
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 gradually climbing,
while
 visits to
London
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the London
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 Science
Museum
 were reducing over time.
Moreover
, Shenzhen
Museum
 was visited by approximately the same
number
 of
visitors
 in 35 years. Getting back to the details, it is observed,
there
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that there
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were
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was
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 an upward tendency in the
number
 of
visitors
 to the
Louvre
, except
of
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between 1995 and 2000. In 1995,
Louvre
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the Louvre
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Museum
 was visited
nearly
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by nearly
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 less than 8 million people, their
number
reached
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will reach
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 a peak of almost more than 9
millions
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million
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, in 2025. The table data clearly shows that at the beginning of the period, as nearly 5 million people visited
to
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apply
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Vatican
museums
, the
number
 of
visitors
 to
this
 place
were
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was
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 climbing in 35 years and hit a high of approximately 9
millions
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million
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 in 2015. It is clear from the data, visits to
London
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the London
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 Science
Museum
 were deteriorating over time even though there
were remain
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remained
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 unchanged
visitors
, which of 4
millions
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million
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, in the first 5 years.
At the end
 of the period, the
number
 of
visitors
 to
this
museum
were
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was
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 less than half the beginning of
this
. As can be seen in the diagram the
number
to
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of
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 Shenzhen
Museum
were
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was
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 stabilizing, and their numbers were the same
number
 of nearly just 4 million in 1995 and 2015.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, museums, louvre, museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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