The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museum
The provided diagram presents data about the
number
of visitors
to four international museums
(Louvre
, Vatican Museums
, London Science Museum
, and Shenzhen Museum
) from 1980 to 2015.
Looking from an overall
perspective, the number
of visitors
gone
to Verb problem
apply
Louvre
and Vatican Correct article usage
the Louvre
Museums
were
gradually climbing, Correct subject-verb agreement
was
while
visits to London
Science Correct article usage
the London
Museum
were reducing over time. Moreover
, Shenzhen Museum
was visited by approximately the same number
of visitors
in 35 years.
Getting back to the details, it is observed, there
Correct word choice
that there
were
an upward tendency in the Change the verb form
was
number
of visitors
to the Louvre
, except of
between 1995 and 2000. In 1995, Remove the preposition
apply
Louvre
Correct article usage
the Louvre
Museum
was visited nearly
less than 8 million people, their Change preposition
by nearly
number
reached
a peak of almost more than 9 Wrong verb form
will reach
millions
, in 2025. The table data clearly shows that at the beginning of the period, as nearly 5 million people visited Change to singular
million
to
Vatican Remove the preposition
apply
museums
, the number
of visitors
to this
place were
climbing in 35 years and hit a high of approximately 9 Correct subject-verb agreement
was
millions
in 2015.
It is clear from the data, visits to Change to singular
million
London
Science Correct article usage
the London
Museum
were deteriorating over time even though there were remain
unchanged Wrong verb form
remained
visitors
, which of 4 millions
, in the first 5 years. Change to singular
million
At the end
of the period, the number
of visitors
to this
museum
were
less than half the beginning of Change the verb form
was
this
. As can be seen in the diagram the number
to
Shenzhen Change preposition
of
Museum
were
stabilizing, and their numbers were the same Correct subject-verb agreement
was
number
of nearly just 4 million in 1995 and 2015.Submitted by sabinanezar93 on
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