The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
The given maps illustrated
road
access to
a
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urban clinic in 2007 and in 2010.
Overall
, the access to the
city
hospital changed drastically with a car park not only for the workers but
also
for the public.
Also
, it can be seen that there has been development for a roundabout.
To begin
with, in 2007, the ring
road
situated
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in the north of the map and just below you can see the
city
clinic is located in the centre of the ring
road
.
Moreover
, a hospital
road
is branched from the ring
road
,
is
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located to the south with
a
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six bus
stop
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.
Additionally
, both the
staff
as well as
the general shared the same parking
space
just next to the bus stop.
Furthermore
, to the south of the map, there
were
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a
city
road
which branched not only the west but
also
the east.
In contrast
, in 2010, the access to the clinic
has
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completely transformed.
Firstly
, the
staff
and public car park
divided
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are divided
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into separate parking
space
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spaces
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.
While
,
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the public has their parking
space
located in the east near the hospital, the
staff
has their own in the east near the
city
road
.
Secondly
, a bus station has been constructed to the southwest with a two roundabout.
However
, the ring
road
as well as
the
city
road
remained the same. Through the
redevelopment
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redevelopment,
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the problem of parking
space
of
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the
staff
and
public
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the public
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has changed.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, as well as".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words road, city, staff, space with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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