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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different month in 2014 from 4 village libraries.

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different month in 2014 from 4 village libraries.
#line #books #four #month #village #libraries
the line graph
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the number of books which
are
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were
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 borrowed by people
of
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from
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 four different
village
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villages
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from libraries in 4 various
month
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months
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 in 2014.
in
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the
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apply
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first
glance
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glance,
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 it is shown that two
village
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villages
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, West Eaton and Chourch
mount
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Mount
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 have
slight
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a slight
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 increase during
this
piriod
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period
 but Ryeslip has
rapid
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a rapid
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 decrease and Sutton
wood
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Wood
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 has fluctuated trend. on june, West
eaton
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Eaton
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 and Church
mount
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Mount
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were
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had
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the
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lowest number of people who
take
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took
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 books from their village libraries but after two
mounths
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months
these
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this
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 number
increase
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increased
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 steadily.Chourch
mount
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Mount
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reache
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reached
reach
reaches
 to peak
on
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in
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 september but West
eaton
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Eaton
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exprience
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experienced
 a plateau
on
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apply
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last
 month. Ryeslip had the most
bookreaders
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book readers
 at
the
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apply
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first but over 4
mounths
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months
 it has
significant
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a significant
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 decrease and
reach
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reached
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 to near 150
person
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people
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 each year which is the lowest point during these
mounths
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months
.
Sotton
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Cotton
Sutton
 wood has
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a fluctuated
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fluctuated
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 trend.
at
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first
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the first
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 month it
climbe
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climbed
climb
steadly
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steadily
steady
 but
on
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in
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july
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July
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 it
had go
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went
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 down considerably and
on
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in
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agust
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august
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the
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trend is on a dip,suddenly
on
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in
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last
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the last
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mounth
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month
 a rapid increase happened.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapid" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • borrowing patterns
  • trend analysis
  • comparison
  • seasonal influence
  • predictions
  • strategies for improvement
  • optimization
  • resource management
  • community engagement
  • library facilities
  • increase borrowing rates
  • monitoring
  • key findings
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