Some people say that television is useful in education, while others say it is useful only for entertainment. Discuss both of these views and give your opinion as to the usefulness of television as an educational tool.

The majority of
people
say that television is advantageous in
education
. Other
people
say it is advantageous only for enjoyment.
According to
myself, it is very enjoyable. In
this
essay, I will discuss both views and I give you my opinion. On the one side, nowadays
people
are used to them for
entertainment
. They
are
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do not want to go out and they can sit and watch everything all over the ward.
Therefore
they addict it. There are have variety of
entertainment
.
Such
as movies, and video games, all over the ward news and advertisement.
Therefore
, nowadays, children and adults get addicted to it and they don't want to get good side it.
For example
, some students after schools watch TV like the cartoon Tom and Jerry they don't want to do anything about another thing. The other major case is those who start to watch television may not close it. They spend a lot of time with them. it has killed
people
many times and they do not have time even with families.
Therefore
, it is family bonding and love is lost.
For instance
, some family's parents
more
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are more
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and more addicted to watching international movies. Even they bring food
for
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out and give it to children so they watch movies.
As a result
, it is killed family bonds.in
this
way,
people
can have more
entertainment
too.
On the other hand
, they can use it for
education
it
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which
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can be more beneficial. There are a lot of
education
programs and there is a lot of titers variety of subjects.
For example
, these days many videos running for IELTS because it is very interesting these days. In
this
way,
people
can take more
education
side too. In conclusion, in
this
way,
people
are
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can use television in many ways. In my opinion,
people
use more
entertainment
than
education
.
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Structure
Consider organizing your essay more clearly with distinct paragraphs for introduction, each view, and conclusion. This will enhance readability and coherence.
Content
Use topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to clearly state the main idea. This will make your arguments more coherent and easier to follow.
Language
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Grammar
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Task Achievement
You've successfully addressed both views as well as provided your own opinion, fulfilling the task requirement.
Content
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