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The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years.

The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years.
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The given charts illustrate the
number
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 changing of marriage and divorce rates in the USA between 1970 and 2000, and the situation of
marital
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marriage
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 in 1970 and 2000.
Overall
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, the charts indicate that the
number
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 of marriages is higher than the
number
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 of divorces,
the
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and the
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 percentage of married
people
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 is the highest.
1From
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1 From
 the first chart, the
number
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 of marriages is approximately double
from
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apply
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the
number
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 of divorces.
However
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, the
number
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 of marriages decreases from 2.5
million
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 to 2
million
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.
2In
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2 In
 contrast, the
number
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 of divorces first shows an upward trend from 1
million
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 to about 1.5
million
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,
then
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 the
number
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 of
it
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them
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 decreases to 1
million
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. The second chart shows that the percentage of married
people
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 in 1970 and 2000 is the highest, at 70% and about 60%.3The trend
of
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apply
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it
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apply
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is the same as the widowed
people
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.4The divorced and
never married
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never-married
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people
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 show
the
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a
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 decreasing trend, which are both below 20%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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