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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year.

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The plans below demonstrate the old map of an
airport
 and transforming to
new
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a new
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 state of an
airport
reconstructing
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reconstructed
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next
year
Overall
, the Southwest
airport's
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airport
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now and after
redevelopments
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redevelopment
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next
year
 vision
has
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 several big changes and adding new services on the right side of
map
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. In
this
map
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map,
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 main and significant redevelopments will happen
this
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airport
's downside part of the building. On the one hand,
the
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southwest
airport
's current state and the developments in the future start by increasing the departure and arrivals
door
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doors
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 to double which
is
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previously the doors has only one entrance and exiting door
both
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of
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them
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. In
this
 building security passport control part has one check-in and café service, the future plan
this
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 side of
building
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the building
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 will be
added
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 the bag drop and another two service check-in and café will be relocated to opposite down and upper corners.
On the other hand
, the passport control customs room currently
has
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 not any services and after redevelopments in
this
 section will be added next
year
, the café, ATM and the most beneficial for arrivals the car hire. After passing the security passport control next
year
 you will encounter some shops and the
last
 two changes of
this
 project
the
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 figures of gates will increase from 8 to 18 and people in order to arrive
their
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 gates the walkway path will be replaced to sky train.
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structure
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introduction conclusion
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examples
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grammar
Review the use of articles (the, a, an) and prepositions (in, on, at) as small errors can detract from the clarity of your ideas.
coherence
Consider the use of transition words ('Furthermore', 'Moreover', 'However', etc.) to improve the flow between your sentences and paragraphs.
content
You provided a clear overall comparison between the current and future state of the airport.
content
You made an effort to describe specific changes and additions to the airport layout.

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