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The map shows the development of the village of Rye mouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The map shows the development of the village of Rye mouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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A glance at the two maps provides the changes
of
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in
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 the Village of Rye mouth between 1995 and
present
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the present
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.
Overall
, the vast
majorty
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majority
 of the facilities and arrangements were changed, whilst the café stayed the same.
According to
 the information shown on the maps, the farmland and the forest park on the east of the village in 1995 are replaced by sports facilities including golf and tennis.
Besides
, the hotel stays at the same location which is across
the
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from the
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 café and has an
addtional
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additional
 car park area at present. When it comes to the
sea side
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seaside
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, both the fish market and the fishing port were removed,
instead
, there are apartments
in
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at
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present
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the present
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 time. Across the apartments are restaurants which
were
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used to be shops in 1995. What should be particularly mentioned is that the housing area is expanded and its road towards the west side is extended now.
To sum up
, it can be apparently seen that the village of Rye
month
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Month
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 experienced a significant revision from 1995 to the present.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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  • development
  • transformation
  • residential areas
  • infrastructure
  • connectivity
  • commercial development
  • public services
  • green spaces
  • recreational areas
  • economic growth
  • lifestyle changes
  • quality of life
  • sustainability
  • layout
  • connectivity
  • impact
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