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In the future people will read only online and no one will buy printed newspapers. to what extent do you agree od disagree?

#future #people #newspapers #od
Nowadays, we can see everyone around us
are tend
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 to read
newspaper
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newspapers
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 through
website
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websites
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 or online
portal
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portals
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 more than the printed version.
This
 kind of issue affects the prediction about the future, there is a saying that states there
are
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will be no one
buy
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buying
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printed
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a printed
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newspaper
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,
few
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 years ahead. I personally agree with the statement that I will discuss more in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with, in
this
 digital era, it is common to know that books, newspapers,
magazines
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and magazines
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 are having their digital versions that can be viewed on the website or other online platforms.
This
 condition leads to the tendency
that
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 people
be
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to be
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 more likely
read
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to read
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such
 readings through their gadgets.
Instead
 of buying the hard copy of those readings, reading the digital copy is more efficient since it is easier to access. The printed version can
we
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be
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get
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obtained
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 by going to the bookstore first and I think it is
such
 a complicated way to
do
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do it
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.
On the other hand
, there are minority of people
that
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who
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 are still reading
newspaper
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newspapers
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by
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in
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its
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their
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 hard copy.
Although
 for some youth
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generations
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generation
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generation,
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this
 case is outdated,
the
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apply
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older people cannot deny that they feel more comfortable
to read
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reading
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newspaper
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newspapers
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by
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in
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its
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their
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 printed version.
Furthermore
, those elders
are
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do
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 not
usual
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usually
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to
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operate smartphones, so it is difficult to access digital
newspaper
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newspapers
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.
To conclude
, the reason I agree printed
newspaper
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is
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are
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 going to
be disappear
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disappear
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 from
future's
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the future's
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 market is because
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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digital
one
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ones
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is
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are
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 very
acessible
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accessible
 to read.
In addition
, there is
also
 a community that still
do
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does
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 not want to change their habit
on
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of
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 reading printed
newspaper
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newspapers
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.
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