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The maps below show changes that have taken place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.

The maps below show changes that have taken place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.
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The maps
illustrates
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 the developments that have
occured
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occurred
 at Queen Mary Hospital during the 40 years period from 1960.
Overall
, a
comparision
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comparison
 of the three maps reveals a change
of
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construction
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 of the hospital
centre
 under the main road. In 1960, the four parts of
landscape
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, shopping
centre
, Hospital, Farmland and Car Park,were divided equally, each took
one
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in
fourth
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a fourth
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 of the territory. In 1980, there were a dramatical.changes. The most noticeable one is that 2 parts,
shopping
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centre
 and
farmland
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the farmland
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,
were
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disappeared.
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 of them, there had built a
nursuing
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nursing
 school, at the left bottom of the territory and in
upper
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 area was built a cancer
centre
 and
pharmace
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pharmacy
, which was
add
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 to
hospital
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 building. After 20 years, there were
a
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apply
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changes in places of departments.
Nursuing
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Nursing
 school and car park have decreased in size and
located
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are located
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 at the right bottom. The cancer
centre
have
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 increased in size and shape, and located on the left side, took three in eighth of all area.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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