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The maps below show changes that have taken place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.

The maps below show changes that have taken place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.
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The presented picture gives information on the changes which took place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005. Generally, a
comparasion
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comparison
 of the two
picture
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pictures
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 demonstrate a change from
rural
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a rural
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 to
urban
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an urban
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 landscape. In 1990
town
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the town
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 was
a
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much greener with
large
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a large
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 number of trees and individual houses, but
the
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 next 15 years the town experienced
the
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a
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amount
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 of changes. The most noticeable is that all of the trees south-east of the
river
 were cut down, with all the houses replaced by
the
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residential apartments and
factory
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factories
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.
Moreover
 a new estate with
supermarket
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a supermarket
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 around the
resedential
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residential
 apartments. Only
few
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a few
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 trees on west north of the
river
unchanged
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are unchanged
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. The
constraction
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construction
 of
ferry
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a ferry
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 near the south-east and a new stretch of railway from the
river
 running straight east. North-west of the
river
 was cleared and improved with the
resedential
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residential
 apartments.
Futher
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Further
 developments were the construction of an airport near the school.
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