Several people assert that the main cause of crime is an economically disadvantaged background. However, other say that crime is caused by a person's nature. Discuss both ideas and give your own opinion.
It is arguable that the reason for the crime is an economic
background
or an individual's nature. In this
essay, we will discuss both points of view and diverge into one
opinion.
There is an opinion that poverty is strongly related to a criminal. It is evident that the environment
affects human beings notably. Economic background
is not the only reason that affects individuals, however
, it is one
of the most reliable features, due to
its effectiveness in determining one
's environment
. People who have negative economic backgrounds tend to reside in low-price areas, which could related to worse morality and higher criminal rates than high-price areas. Thus
, economic background
could affect one
's morality. For instance
, there was a TV program in which normal people sneak into the prison, and that show demonstrates the possibility of attendants intending criminals increased drastically.
On the other hand
, it is clear that
in some cases, the environment
does not affect one
's criminal, but an individual's personality. We showed a lot of examples that some serial killers had grown up in friendly families. Their possibility of being criminals could be observed from a young age, such
as abusing animals or a lack of emotional expression regardless of environment
. They could be improved with some education, nevertheless
, it is obvious that the cause is not from the economic background
.
To sum up
, it is clear that
a disadvantaged economic background
and a person's nature both affect the possibility of crime. Yet, personally, the economic environment
could be more related to criminals, due to
its effectiveness and frequent access in daily life.Submitted by forbid403 on
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Clarity
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Thesis Statement
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Sentence Variation
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Balance and Neutrality
In discussing both views, try to maintain a balanced approach before presenting your own opinion.
Supporting Examples
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Topic Engagement
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Conclusion
The conclusion summarizes the discussion and states your opinion, showing good structure.
Your opinion
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