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Band 1.5

countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy some product anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive of negative develolment?

#countries #people #product #world #develolment
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 is given that buyers can have items from all
the
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over the
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 world using
online-shopping
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online shopping
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,
i
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I
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 believe
that is
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 useful for people around the world.
Nowaday
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 many people have
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a chance
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chance
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a chance
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 to
make shopping
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shop
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 through
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a network
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network
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a network
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,
however
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 by
multi click
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, so buyers
able
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are able
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 to have what they want, without
traveling
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travelling
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, sometimes there are good prices better than in
oficial
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official
 shop, maybe there is some
challenge
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 regarding the sizes if the items will be not fit.
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 could
face
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people
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by people
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 who
using
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use
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online-shop
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online
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, its about
time
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the time
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 of delivery, or cancel the process, so they should
to
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apply
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contact
seller
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the seller
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 section to
explaine
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explain
 the problem, and that takes
times
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time
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. Shopping
in
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on
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network
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the network
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make
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makes
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pepole
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people
do
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not control themself, they tend to buy
shat
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what
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 they need or not. Another
ideas
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says
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 that some
pepole prefere
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people prefer
buy
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to buy
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 in
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an oficial
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oficial
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official
 shop,
check
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and check
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 what want in real life, without using pictures to buy the product.
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main idea development
Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and develop this with specific examples.
clarity of ideas
Use topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to make your main ideas clear.
structure improvement
Adding an introduction and a conclusion will help frame your essay and express your viewpoint more clearly.
grammar and punctuation
Be mindful of sentence structure and punctuation to improve readability.
balance of viewpoints
You've included several positive and negative aspects of online shopping, which helps balance your essay.
understanding of topic
Your essay reflects an understanding of the subject matter, showing that you've thought about the implications of global online shopping.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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