The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graphs illustrate how much percentage
three
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kinds of electrical products which support household chores account for and how many
hours
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per
week
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people spent
for
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doing
houseworks
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housework
between 1920 and 2019.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that the
figure
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for the proportion of using three electrical
houseworks
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housework
house works
devices has
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upward trend approximately over a 100-year period.
In addition
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, there was
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upward trend in the
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representing the
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number
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of
hours
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per
week
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for
houseworks
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housework
. In detail, the
figure
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for
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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started
approximately
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at approximately
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nothing in 1920,
while
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the
figure
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for washing
machine
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machines
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and
vacuum
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cleaner
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cleaners
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started at respectively 40% and 30%. There was a rapid growth in the
figure
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for
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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from 5% to 100% until 1980. There was no change from 1980 to the final year in 2019. The
figure
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for
vacuum
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cleaner
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cleaners
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increased gradually over
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an
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80-year period until 2000, it stayed stable at 100% after 2000. Unlike the
figure
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for refrigerator and
vacuum
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cleaner, the
figure
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for washing machine showed
slightly
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fluctuation.
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, the
figure
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for
vacuum
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cleaner
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cleaners
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did not reach
at
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apply
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100% in the final year. Turning to the
figure
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for the second one, it started at 50
hours
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per
week
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in 1920. There was a rapid drop from 1920 to 1960 by 30
hours
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per
week
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afterwards. The time for household
works
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work
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per
week
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remained nearly constant for 80 years between 1960 to 2019.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, week, figure, vacuum with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 10 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rapid" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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