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Some schools have restricted the ude o f mobile phones. Is this a positve development or a negative development. Give reasons for your answer and include any example fro your own knowledge or experience.

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One of the most prevalent trends in the contemporary world is the use of technological devices in
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school
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 across all the countries of the world.
Although
 these devices are useful in many ways
but
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they have their own disadvantages as well. In
this
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a logical conclusion.
Firstly
, students used to study in
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 where teachers used to teach everything on the black or white board and students were habitual to
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 to them and
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 in certain
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 in questioning sessions. In
this
way
, scholars were able to
concetrate
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concentrate
 on the study as there were no ways to get distracted which seems like a positive
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 if
education
 institutes have restricted the use of phones.
Moreover
,
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 schools have changed
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way
 of providing
education
 to pupils. Educators are using technological devices like LCD screens or computers in
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 environment which is somehow taking the students away from
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educations
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 as educators are not able to go
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 every desk and check the work of their tutees. So, it is
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negative
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 impact on the quality of
education
 provided in the centre of learning.
To sum up
, I believe that everything comes with some sort of advantages and disadvantages and it all depends on human
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 how
that
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 sources are utilised. As if the use of
phone
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 is beneficial in
school
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environement
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environment
 as it can help
student
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 to understand today's tech world
whereas
 it is taking away pupils from
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quality
education
.
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