children nowadays spend great deal of time watching television.However television cannot replace as learning tool which is why children are less educated today.To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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advancement
of digital and print media children nowadays Correct article usage
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major
chunk of their time watching it.Though television can play a major role in Add an article
a major
education
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children
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,some authorities Correct your spelling
performance
believed
that it cannot take Wrong verb form
believe
place
of books and practicals and youth nowadays Correct article usage
the place
is
less knowledgeable than in past.I Correct subject-verb agreement
are
personaly
agree with it and I will discuss that through examples in Correct your spelling
personally
following
paragraphs.
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the following
The
digital media cannot replace the teachings of teachers who educate by spending their precious time on building the skills of the student.Correct article usage
apply
For
example
The Experience gained through studying in schools like Add a comma
example,
recongnition
of objects or pencil holding and grip on it cannot be learnt on our screens.Correct your spelling
recognition
Thus
most valuable practical lessons are learnt offline.
Furthermore
many empathic lessons are only gained in group settings Add a comma
Furthermore,
for
example
sharing,caring for other emotions,respect for elders and social service to society is
only practiced physically and though taught online Correct subject-verb agreement
are
dose'nt
have that same impact.Even if a baby Correct your spelling
don't
see
them Change the verb form
sees
everday
can't understand the concept without experiencing it.Correct your spelling
he
Further
a Add a comma
Further,
child
may recognize an object online but may not react to it if seen physically. For
example
, there is a disesase
called screen Correct your spelling
disease
autisim
in which Correct your spelling
autism
child
understand Correct article usage
a child
the
object or animal or Correct article usage
an
identify
colors on Correct subject-verb agreement
identifies
t.v
but not in front of it.
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TV
th
contrary Many objects which are harmful in their natural settings like wild animals or many Correct your spelling
the
off season
fruits and Add a hyphen
off-season
vegetable
can be taught in Fix the agreement mistake
vegetables
this
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a kin can have a knowledge
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it Change preposition
of
with out
its access.It not only Correct your spelling
without
save
money but Correct subject-verb agreement
saves
also
time and also
can help parents to focus on their work while
the child
is watching it on scree
. Correct your spelling
screen
For
example
many Add a comma
example,
documentry
channels like Correct your spelling
documentary
national geographic
provide Correct your spelling
National Geographic
first hand
experience to the viewer.
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first-hand
To conclude
,I personally believe that in hand expeirence
is more Correct your spelling
experience
resourcful
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resourceful
then
what Correct your spelling
than
taught
online and a balance between both is Add a missing verb
is taught
necessory
in order for our youth to learn.Correct your spelling
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