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There are growing demand for fresh water nowadays and this is becoming a global problem. What are the causes and solutions.

#demand #water
The issue of shortages of pure
water
 is growing impulsively in global terms .
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worrying
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 trend since it
cause
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 millions of massive health issues.From my perspective the most detrimental causes are dehydration of lands,
as well as
,
crisis
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 among the people for drinkable liquid, to overcome the global
water
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shortages
shortage
shorteges
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shortage
,
government
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 should allocate funds to
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build
beuld
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build
water
 tunnels which could provide
water
 locals
also
 put
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strick
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 rules for those who waste it One of the most significant and widespread concerns is the health of the people, when during the consumption of muddy or unfiltered
water
, from
rivars
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rivers
and rain sources, people can contaminate their body with viruses and toxins which will cause
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 of the temperature in
human
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 body and many more. In order to resolve
this problems
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. I guess that it
firstly
 has to be addressed, perhaps the most effective method of doing it is providing underground
water
 lines
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 because it will provide total use of
water
 for drinking or washing staffs.The next measure would be restriction of overuse of
water
,
as well as
, through the fraction of rubbish to the surface of
water
. In my conception, I reckon that the best way to
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away from global
shorteges
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shortages
shortage
is to create better laws that
keeps
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us from schemes and pollution of drinking liquids.
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Task Response
Clarify and expand your ideas. Instead of mentioning solutions broadly, elaborate on how these solutions can be implemented and their potential impact.
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Task Response
You addressed both causes and solutions for the water shortage issue, which aligns with the task requirements.
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You have shown awareness of the global water shortage problem and suggested relevant measures to tackle it.

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