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Many people think that to become a successful specialist it's better to choose a career early in life and never changer it later. To what extent do you agree with tis view. support your opinion with relevant examples.

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Some
people
 believe that to become an expert in your job, you need to start it as soon as possible. Choosing a job at a young
age
 and continuing it can provide a good career in the future. And I agree with the statement that, in order to find enough skills, you have to start working at a young
age
. Youth is considered a
time
 when
people
 have more motivation and dream better. Some motivation, some effort, and some dreaming are all that
people
 need to succeed. Learning is easier in the pre-middle years. if someone starts a career. In their youth,
people
 are less conservative, have more effort, and have better physical ability to do things, which can make the path of specialization easier. Life does not give us enough
time
, and in today's advanced world, which is considered the
age
 of technology,
time
 is an important element in surpassing competitors. To be a specialist, you need to gain more experience. Experience is a precious gem; it is not acquired overnight, and in order to find expertise and enough skills, you must go through many failures and victories. Another important factor in becoming an expert is having more relationships in your major. If you know more
people
, you can learn more and pass the difficulties better. At an earlier
age
, you can make better friendships, and it is easier to communicate with others.
Although
 starting anything at any
time
 is much better than not starting at all, There are many professionals who started working at an advanced
age
 and still achieved success, but youth should be valued, and with concentration and effort at a younger
age
, difficult paths can be easily covered. .
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Your essay shows a solid comprehension of the task with a clear viewpoint supported by examples. Maintain this clarity and depth in all your essays.
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Task Achievement
Your arguments are well-supported, but including a wider range of real-world examples could enhance your points further.
Task Achievement
You've effectively presented a clear viewpoint and argued it with confidence.
Coherence/Cohesion
You've done well in providing a logical flow to your essay, making it easy to follow.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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