The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The given chart displays the figure for the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the percentage of
people
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using cars experienced an upward trend
while
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the opposite was true with
bike
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bikes
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and foot that of.
Besides
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, the proportion of individuals using buses witnessed a fluctuation.
To begin
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with, the figure for buses used started at 20% in 1960 and it
then
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increased to 27% approximately,
however
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, it declined to 17% in 2000. There was a considerable rise in the percentage of
people
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using cars which started at below 10% in 1960 and
then
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peaked at 37% roughly after four decades. Moving on to the other categories, the proportion of
commuter
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commuters
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transporting by bike and foot had a relatively similar trend. The figure for
people
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transporting by bike began at around 27% in 1960 and
then
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it remarkably decreased by 20% in 2000.
Lastly
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, the percentage of
people
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travelling by foot in 1960 was highest at approximately 35%,
however
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, it witnessed a significant decrease of 25% after 40 years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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