Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission outweigh the disadvantages?
A significant portion of historic art buildings seek payment to permit entrance to the enthusiasts
while
others provide this
facility without any charge. I believe charging a certain amount of fees is essential and it undermines the downsides of such
practice.
To begin
with, art monuments costing an
admission fees are at Correct article usage
apply
superior
level than others. There are many factors that Add an article
a superior
attribute
to Verb problem
contribute
such
fact. At first,
museums need maintenance on daily
basis. Certain artefacts stored in the museum have to be preserved in a technical way. Many scientific equipments are used to fulfill Correct article usage
a daily
such
kind of purpose. For instance
, some excavated things from the bygone eras require chemical preservation methods. It may cost the authorities alot
. Correct your spelling
a lot
Thus
, public
should reimburse that cost by paying ticket fees. Add an article
the public
Apart from
this
, these monuments require many associates to maintain cleanliness and order of
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in
museum
. It is the Add an article
the museum
a museum
responsibilty
of Correct your spelling
responsibility
public
to maintain these resourceful Add an article
the public
places
for themselves and their
next generations.Change the word
the
Consequently
, such
informational buildings will remain intact by the funding provided by the masses.
On the contrary
, there are some monuments that give free access to masses
. It Correct article usage
the masses
also
have
some benefits because these resourceful Change the verb form
has
places
will provide information to the public about past
without costing any money. Correct article usage
the past
Although
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However
such
places
have
not much longer life spans and generally Add a missing verb
do have
deteroriate
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deteriorate
deteriorated
due to
negligence in maintenance. As a result
, free of cost
service could not save the future presence of these Add a hyphen
free-of-cost
places
.
To conclude
, museums that charge money from public
are well-maintained and preserved by the state or private authorities. The positive impact of Add an article
the public
this
will be that these will be available to the
future generations and provide Correct article usage
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understanding
of the past effectively. Despite the positive impacts of charging payment, it could increase Add an article
an understanding
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on Add an article
the burden
public
for its maintenance. In a nutshell, it is Add an article
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overall
positive practice.Correct article usage
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