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Computers and A.I. technology are increasingly being used for online education. Can artificial intelligence enhance the learning experience? Is this a positive or negative development?

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In recent years, technology
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 now increasingly applied in teaching online.
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,
this
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 phenomenon
have
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 bad effects on
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' experience which is misunderstanding knowledge from
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these applications
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.
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,
this
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 seems to be a
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negative
 advancement among
learners
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that
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in that
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 it can lead them to a lazy studying style. It should
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 that artificial intelligence bring
students
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misunderstand
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 knowledge
while
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unsing
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using
 it in study. These equipment have
database
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databases
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depend
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depending
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 on
users
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users'
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 decisions, they can change
its
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their
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 data without
cheking
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checking
 it. If schools use it in learning,
learners
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 can be confused about the knowledge
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which
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 can harm their
further
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 study immediately. For
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, in Vietnam,
students
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 use
ChatGPT
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 to do their literature homework;
however
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,
ChatGPT
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 brings them the wrong
information
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 about the author of the novel they search for. Using computers or artificial intelligence for online
education
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have
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has
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 many negatives
such
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 as laziness in
students
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. When studying online, young
learners
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 can be easily distracted from studying and teachers
also
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 cannot control all the
students
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 in a course.
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,
Internet
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the Internet
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 can be used as a tool for
students
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 to search for
information
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 without thinking about its root.
As a result
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, they become lazy
learners
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 and have no intention
in
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of
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 finding and absorbing the
information
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. Taking
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 as an example,
students
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 extremely depend on
this
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 application
in finding
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to find
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information
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 and
store
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storing
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 the
detail
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details
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of
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apply
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it
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apply
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into
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in
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ChatGPT
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's history in spite of their notebooks.
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, online
education
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 should be
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strict
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 and firm in order to have a good result
of
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for
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learners
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.
To sum up
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, online
education
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 brings
students
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cannot
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who cannot
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enhace
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enhance
the
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their
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 experience in learning because of the confusing
information
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 it
store
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stores
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.
Furthermore
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,
this
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 can not be applied as a long-term
education
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 when its functions can easily lead to laziness in
learners
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, especially
the
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apply
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young
students
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.

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Task Achievement
Try to develop a more balanced view on the topic by discussing both the potential benefits and drawbacks of artificial intelligence in education.
Grammar
Carefully proofread your essay for grammatical errors and ensure the correct usage of articles (e.g., 'an', 'the').
Coherence & Cohesion
Use a wider variety of sentence structures to improve the sophistication of your writing.
Task Achievement
To strengthen your essay, include more specific examples and discuss them in detail to support your arguments.
Coherence & Cohesion
Make sure to organize your essay with clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the topic.
Task Achievement
You provided specific examples, such as the use of ChatGPT by students in Vietnam, which helps to ground your arguments in real-world circumstances.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarises your viewpoint, clearly stating your stance on the topic.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innovative platforms
  • customized learning
  • adaptability
  • efficiency
  • lifelong learning
  • automation
  • feedback mechanisms
  • educational resources
  • remote accessibility
  • critical thinking
  • emotional development
  • over-reliance
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