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the charts below give information on the ages of the populations of yemen and italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. summarize the information and make comparison.

the charts below give information on the ages of the populations of yemen and italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. summarize the information and make comparison.
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The chart below
give
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 information on the ages of the populations of
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Yemen
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yemen
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Yemen
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 and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050 The four pie charts illustrate the ages of the residents of
yemen
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Yemen
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 and Italy in 2000 and predictions
of
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for
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 2050. There are three
age
groups
 in
this
 paper.
Such
 as 0-14
years
 ,15- 59
years
 and 60+
years
.
Overall
, both countries'
the
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elderly and
teenager
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population
 rates are assumed to exhibit a downward trend in 2050. Yeman, Is-69
years
population
 will rise in the future than the other two
groups
.
To begin
 with,In 2000,
yemen
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Yemen
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 60 +
age
population
percentage
 was 3.6%.
Yemen
 think, the
population
percentage
 will increase to 5.7% in 2050.16-59
years
residents
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of residents
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 were
ress
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dress
percan
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per cent
person
lage
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large
 than the 0-14
years
age
 group percentages.
In addition
, In 2050,
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yeoman
yeinan
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the yeinan
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 15-59
years
population
percentage
 will
more
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 than the 0-14
years
percentage
On the other hand
, in 2000,
Italy
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Italy's
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 15-59
years
population
percentage
 was more than the other two
groups
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groups'
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 percentages. The
percentage
 was 61.61.
Furthermore
, in 2050,
Italy
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Italy's
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 15-54
age
 group will increase than the other two
groups
. The
percentage
 will 46.21.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words yemen, age, groups, years, population, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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