With a growing worls population one of the most pressing issues is that of feeding such large number of people. Some people think that GM foods offer a viable solution to this problem. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

Overpopulation has been a debatable and ever-increasing issue worldwide leading to negative impacts
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many fields, mainly famine and exponential growth in
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rate. Some scientists
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that Genetically Modified (GM) foods
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the best solution to struggle against
this
situation,
while
many others argue that it will not solve the hunger
that is
suffered by millions of
people
. I partially agree with
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statement, and in
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I am
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explaining
both points of view. To start with, genetically engineered food has been widely researched in order to improve not only quality but
also
speed of production and durability.
For
this
reason,
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techniques
such
as DNA and RNA modifications
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been proposed.
For example
,
vegetables
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crops have been changed to avoid seeds inside them and to
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remain
remind
as fresh as possible for many weeks.
Besides
, these modifications could prevent
growing
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microorganisms in the goods.
However
, hunger is not only a problem related to
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of food that are produced
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but
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a social difficulty because some
people
do not have access to buy them. It is one of the main misfortune across third-world countries where
people
do not have enough resources to buy and distribution is
inequal
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.
For example
, in Colombia, many
people
live under impoverished conditions in which their families cannot be fed
due to
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of stipends.
On the other hand
, these techniques must be deeply studied because mutations and impacts in our genetic material are unknown.
To sum up
, there have been created cutting-edge techniques to deal with feeding obstacles.
Nevertheless
, many
others
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factors should be evaluated because humanity
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to face
with
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social inequality, poverty and scarcity.
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structure
Ensure every paragraph contributes effectively to the argument by developing a single idea further. The second paragraph could be enhanced by directly linking the scientific research on GM foods to how it could potentially address global hunger.
examples
Introduce more specific examples or data to strengthen your arguments. While you mention Colombia as an example, incorporating statistics or outcomes of GM food programs could have made your essay more persuasive.
accuracy
Be mindful of spelling and grammatical accuracy, although minor errors do not significantly impede understanding. For example, 'remaind' should be 'remain' and 'inequal' should be 'unequal'
introduction conclusion
You've effectively introduced and concluded your essay, presenting a clear thesis statement and summarizing your points well in the conclusion.
topic understanding
Your essay demonstrates a good understanding of the topic by discussing both benefits and concerns regarding GM foods in addressing global hunger.
logical flow
You successfully maintain a logical flow throughout your essay, using cohesive devices to link ideas and paragraphs together.

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