Some people believe that technology has led to many positive developments in their lives, while others think technology is gradually taking over control of the way people live. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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think smart
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their work and daily routines . I can not live
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for my comfort and access easy
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everything’s
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for myself. There are different
advantage
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that you can
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your
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.a simple example is smart phone
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the phone
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pay money
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buy something ,play
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social media , research
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you can watch the newest movie and read a book
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we can utilization you will have the most comfortable
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with
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you can save a time .in fact , we can improve and optimize our
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robot
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can help
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human
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AI that
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all the information has
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drive without a driver that it
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accident
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is benefit
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human
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and will be.
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has an equally damaging effect on
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, maybe it has a destructive impression on their brain,they like to put in isolation,the human
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exercise and day to day their becomes lazier but everything
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on their personality . In fact,if
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the best way,it is their problem because if you can manage your personality,you can exploit everything in the worst
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