Some people believe that technology has led to many positive developments in their lives, while others think technology is gradually taking over control of the way people live. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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impact of
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effect on their
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their work and daily routines . I can not live
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for myself. There are different
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about
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on
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you can watch the newest movie and read a book
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establishes
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new
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a robot
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in the world
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drive without a driver that it
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so
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human
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and will be.
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of
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real
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exercise and day to day their becomes lazier but everything
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on their personality . In fact,if
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technology
the best way,it is their problem because if you can manage your personality,you can exploit everything in the worst
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condition
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is perfect if you want.
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