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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart compares the quantity of rented and owned real-estate property in England and Wales in the
year
 1918 and almost a century later in 2011.
Overall
, it may be seen that the number of
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rented
accomodation
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accommodations
 was mentionable higher till 1971,
while
 since that
year
 the percentage of owned homes accelerated significantly.
Furthermore
, in 1918 the proportion of rented
accomodation
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accommodation
 to self-owned
one
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ones
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 was almost
with
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around 22% and almost 80% respectively.
However
, in 1961
this
 trend changed and the number of owned houses made up 40% and less than 60% percent of the
overall
 number were occupied by the tenants. In the
year
of
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1981
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1981,
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 there was a leap
of
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in
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housholds
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households
 in owned
accomodation
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accommodation
. Since
then
, the percentage of
the
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possessed homes
was
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has been
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 higher during the whole remaining period. Twenty years later, in 2001 the rate of rented
houshold
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household
households
 was the lowest and occupied merely 31 %,
while
this
year
demostrated
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demonstrated
 the highest proportion of the owned
accomodation
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accommodation
. By the end of
studying
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 period, the difference between
two
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 compared issues made up around 30% with 64% of the
housholds
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households
 in owned
accomodation
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accommodation
 and 36%
of
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in
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 lessees.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, accomodation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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