You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people want governments to spend money looking for life on other planets. Others, however, think this is a waste of public money when there are so many problems on earth. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. You should write at least 250 words.

In
this
peroid
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period
the
people
want governments to spend
money
for
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on
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living their new
life
in
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on
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other
planets
. Others think
this
is
waste
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a waste
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of
money
when there are so many problems
in
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on
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current
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the current
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planet. There are many advantages and
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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for
the
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life
in
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on
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other
planets
.
Firstly
, The
people
want
government
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the government
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to raise
money
for
new
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a new
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life
in
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on
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other
planets
.
This
can help the countries to gain in
economy
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the economy
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and it will save the
people
in
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other
planets
because
,
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apply
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In
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nowdays
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there are many
population
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on
earth
which
was
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problem
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a problem
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in living
due to
the
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natural
disaster
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disasters
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and global warming.
This
can help the
people
alive
in
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on
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other
planets
for example
, If they had a tsunami, they would
died
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.
On the other hand
, many
peoples
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people
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think
this
is a waste of
money
when there are so many problems on
current
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the current
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planet.
They
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deforestation
the
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woods and
build
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building
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their homes
it
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leads
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lead
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to
the
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pollution and
insufficent
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insufficient
oxygen for living
organism
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organisms
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. The
government
can raise funds to invest in good
eduaction
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education
for the rural
people
as well as
urban
peopleto
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people to
teach how to
many
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make
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our
earth
better
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a better
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place
to live and help
people
to live their
life
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lives
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.
For example
, In
africa
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Africa
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, so many rural
area
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areas
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people
are hungry for
foods
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food
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, water, and shelter
they
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the
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government
can help the
people
to make their
place
better. In conclusion, my opinion
to
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is to
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stand with
people
who support
to make
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making
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our
earth
a better
place
to live a better
life
. Because
,
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we can make our
earth
to peaceful
place
for living
organism
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organisms
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. So I strongly oppose the
government
to spend
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spending
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money
for
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on
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life
in
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on
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other
planets
.
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