Computers and AI technology are increasingly being used for online education. Can artifical intelligence enhance the learning experience? Is this a positive or negative development?
As computers are being accepted more and more in the educational system, there will soon be no role for the instructors in the academy. I totally disagree with
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can identify offspring's necessities and Correct article usage
the cadre
department
can motivate them to reach their educational goals in life.
One reason that I disagree with Correct article usage
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statement is that crew as human beings have the ability to give an individual attention to their recruitment and perceive what help they need. More importantly, it is common that many teens have issues with math or reading and the institute could address this
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situation so is important to have a human being to be able to classify their own necessities. For instance
, in The United States, most of the elementary faculty hire tutors to provide tutoring support after school to help those offspring who have issues in math or reading.
Another reason that I disagree is
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, many of these crew help offspring to
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, in Los Angeles, many middle institute
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Grammar & Vocabulary
Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and proper terminology. For example, use 'staff' instead of 'cadre', 'students' instead of 'offspring', and 'teachers' instead of 'crew' or 'department' to ensure clarity and accuracy.
Task Achievement
Improve the clarity of your argument by directly addressing the question asked. For instance, your essay could benefit from a clearer discussion on whether you believe AI in education is positive or negative, linking your points back to the role of computers and AI in education.
Coherence & Cohesion
Consider using a wider range of cohesive devices and transitional phrases to improve the flow of your essay. This will help in making your argument more coherent and easy to follow.
Developed Argument
You provided clear, well-supported arguments for the importance of human teachers, using relevant examples to strengthen your case.
Concise Conclusion
Your conclusion effectively summarises your viewpoint and the main points of your essay, reinforcing your argument against the complete replacement of teachers by technology.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite