The number of children that read books for fun has dropped dramatically in recent years. What are the reasons for this? How can we encourage children to read more?
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habit
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habits
leisure
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their leisure
time
indicate a decrease in some nearly years. In this
essay today, I will deal with the reasons
cause this
situation and come up with the
way to promote the percentage of reading in Correct article usage
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children
.
On the one hand, there are two major reasons
that make children
not choose reading books
for relaxing. Firstly
, because of development
of technology, people Correct article usage
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children
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usually
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the Internet
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YouTube
Tiktok
, playing games, ect, Correct your spelling
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instead
of looking for interesting from
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books
. Secondly
, more and more books
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details
along
with
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children
. For
this
reason, not only children
, parents
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but parents
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pick
out the types of Change the verb form
picking
books
for their babies.
On the other hand
, above some reasons
cause children
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books
for relaxing, I think there are some methods to encourage children
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leisure
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their leisure
time
. The first one is that the publisher should check typescript
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the typescript
careful
before release to the public in order to Change the word
carefully
children
have appropriate kinds and detail
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details
to
their ages. Change preposition
for
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distorted
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be penalised
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heavily
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detrimental effects to
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on
children
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Furthermore
, parents and schools should encourage children
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books
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devices
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computers
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more outside activities include do excersive and conservation with friends.
In conclusion, some Correct subject-verb agreement
creates
reasons
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answer
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reading
books
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some Change the verb form
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case
to deal with Fix the agreement mistake
cases
this
problem and foster more reading habit
in Fix the agreement mistake
habits
children
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