The graph below shows the percentage of female students on four different courses at one university from 1970 to 2015.

The graph below shows the percentage of female students on four different courses at one university from 1970 to 2015.
The graph illustrates the proportion of different courses of female students at one university with
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intervals, starting from 1970 to 2015.
According to
the figure, it can be seen that computer science is popular at first and
then
it is surpassed by law almost throughout the period.
However
, female students are
also
interested in
medicine
in one of the periods. Computer science occupied 27% in the first year and
then
continuously increased to just under 75% in 1990. Afterwards, it nosedived and
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off at roughly 55% in 2005. A noticeable fall to 35% was seen again in 2015.
On the other hand
,
law
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that started at the lowest point
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was about 10% in 1970, surged to a peak at 90% in 2000 and moderately swung to well under 100% in 2015.
Physic
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and
Medicine
had the same trajectory from 1970, at 30% and 20%, to 1985, at 45% and 35% consecutively. In 1990,
medicine
shot up and overcame
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by 10% and it still climbed up to just under 75%
while
physic
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hovered at 55%.
Moreover
, both
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and
medicine
soared together and ended the period at well over 90% and around 85% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words medicine, physic with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • male-dominated
  • steady
  • fluctuating
  • popularity
  • influence
  • societal changes
  • advocacy
  • gender equality
  • enrollment
  • academic disciplines
  • declines
  • plateau phases
  • gender diversity
  • inclusion
  • educational sector
  • workforce
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