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Writing Samples
Band 6.5

You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meetings said that they loked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter say what the participants liked about the hotel explain why they were unhappy about the food suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in the future

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Dear sir, I am writing
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 email to express my concern regarding the service we received at your hotel, The Paramount.
Firstly
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, our whole staff liked the hotel, especially the ambience. It was so beautiful and we were mesmerised by its structure and design.
Moreover
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, your staff members were behaved and extremely polite.
However
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, some of our team members were not happy about the food served as most of the dishes contained peanuts, and a few of our team members were allergic.
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, there was
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 a lack of vegetarian options.
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, it would be great if you could revise the menu to include more green options and avoid peanuts in most of the dishes.
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, I would recommend some vegetarian options
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 paneer tikka or malai kofta, which are some of the most famous recipes in the world.

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task achievement
Consider adding a closing line expressing appreciation for their attention to your feedback or an invitation for further discussion.
coherence and cohesion
While the letter has a good structure, try to ensure that each paragraph solely focuses on one idea, which can help improve clarity.
task achievement
The positive description of the hotel and your courteous tone effectively convey gratitude and concern.
coherence and cohesion
The letter maintains a good logical structure, with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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